I’ve gotten through editing chapter one. It’s mostly trimming sentences or replacing boring verbs with better ones or clarifying or realizing that I’ve used the same word twice in same sentence. Truth is, I wonder if it’s too front-loaded—if there’s actually too much going in the first ten pages or so that it might confuse readers.
I’ll worry about that on the next pass, I think.
Instead of printing out the manuscript or immediately handing it over to a beta reader, I uploaded the document onto my Kindle. It’s not quite as well-formated as a real e-book would be, but I find that the Kindle is great for reading–no urge to fiddle with my story every ten minutes.
So what I did and what I’m hoping to continue doing as I go through this editing stage is:
- Reading through the book to see how it reads. Does it make sense? Is there too much of this, too little of that?
- Am I filtering? (i.e., do I have Miles looking at things when it’s in his POV and therefore, obvious that he has to be looking at it or else why am I even mentioning it?)
- Is there enough description? Can I picture the setting? (Since, you know, it’s been awhile since I’ve read the first few chapters)
- Can it be cut? Is it redundant?
- Too. Many. Adverbs. I feel like adverbs somehow fit well into early 19th century language, but in modern writing, too much of it is a no-no.
- Good God, why all the m-dashes?
- Um, one word instead of three is better.
- Why do all my sentences use the verb “to be?” Lots of “was” and “were” going on.